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Change: what happened to the boy. She considered sinister reasons, such as revenge for something Junin had done in the past or using Junin as a reason to waste resources finding the island, but those seemed improbable. The Major seemed honorable enough, for all his annoyances.
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Change: headto the precariously,back givingof her nomind easeafter fromthe herfirst two weeks, until the Major had showed up. She really had no worries.idea why Therehe was justsuddenly so manyinterested waysin thingswhat couldhappened goto wrong.the boy.
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Change: That Junin, he didn't seem worth the trouble. And, and, what if he didn't want to come off the island? Then the whole mission would
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Change: potatoes, you'll probably poison it." Junin crossed his arms fiercely, looking rather like a child who refused to eat his vegitables. There was long silence."You may go hungry then." Redwing spoke for the first timewere in a long time. "I'll boil somefact water,on perhapsthe I
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Change: the beach ages ago?" Eseth growled in Junin's general direction. Junin looked down at the floor, embarrassed, his arrogant comfidence of composure broken for the first time since he arrived on the island."Well sure I guess." He retorted weakly.
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Change: in a long time. "I'll boil some water, perhaps I can make a stew." Kaza set to work "You Realize that if we would have wanted you dead, I would have left you to die on the beach ages ago?" Eseth growled in Junin's general direction.
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Change: "I want no part in your vulgar meat and potatoes, you'll probably poison it." Junin crossed his arms fiercely, looking rather like a child who refused to eat his vegitables. There was long silence."You may go hungry then." Redwing spoke for the first time in a long time. "I'll
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Change: "You know full well what the problem is! You know enough of your own wicked nature to know you would sell us out in a moment." Snarled Eseth.This silenced him for the moment.Feeling absolutely sure there was nothing else to
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Change: sell us out in a moment." Snarled Eseth.This silenced him for the moment. Feeling absolutely sure there was nothing else to do in the way of safety, they are sat down on some wooden chairs, talking occasionally, but mostly lost in thought.
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Change: "Honestly, I don't know what the problem is." "You know full well what the problem is! You know enough of your own wicked nature to know you would sell us out in a moment." Snarled Eseth.This silenced him for the moment.
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Change: "It's just like home, when we used toJunin hidesat fromand the swan armies inside ourtable, house.looking Mummore wouldfrustrated sealby the windows with black out curtainsminute. andBy we'dthe alltime goKaza intowas thefinished, basement."it "Youwas
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Change: right." And after finishing that small speech, Kaza returned to whatever it was she was doing. Junin sat Pouting In the corner of the room, "Why do I have to stay here with you?"
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Change: "You miss your home don't you? Well, I won't lie, there's nothing I can do or say that will be of any value and I
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Change: know if that'll work for four people. It's pretty big, and Juninthe snarled,passage "thisit wasn'tactually evenpretty mysmall."Kaza ideabit soher Ilip. don'tSmirking careat whereher, Junin exclaimed "Did you know you idiotshave runan to."overbite?"The"Shut
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Change: usual derisive monologue and Redwing followed them. Being an entirely unanimously agreed party (well besides Junin but, seriously, does he count?) they went to Redwings passageway and hid out there, bringing plenty of snacks with them, they might be dow there for a while.
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Change: They packed up various blankets and picnic baskets and retreated into the forest. "The only thing that remains is to decide where exactly we ought to go in the forest, the tree or the secret passageway? I vote passageway myself, it being in my house." said Redwing complacently."I
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Change: asked I'llJunin, fightwho 'em."was Appropriately,grinning. she"I'd kickedlove ato go home. With you lot coming along, too. Especially that Red Angel."Redwing scowled at him, and Eseth nearbyrolled her eyes. Kaza snarled "That unfortunatesettles rockit. We're going into the abyss.forest."
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Change: on her back, soaking in the firstsunlight. toJunin spotsat a them.little "I'mways savedapart from youthem, idiots!"wings criedfolded Junintightly gratefullyagainst tohis noback. one"You indo particular.realize Esethit's andstill Kazapractically swiveledwinter?" aroundasked
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Change: "Kaza look! There's a group of angels approaching. I believe they're swans." said Eseth who was the first to spot them. "I'm saved from you
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Change: The Major bobbed his head approvingly. "Good, good. I think it's about a half hour till we reach the island, so the airship should have plenty of time to get near."Smirking, Sargent Juyall said "Oh, but what if the island vanishes while the ship comes?"The Major
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